I'm not sure of the title of this piece and I'm not sure of how I want to arrange the stanzas. I've tried several different arrangements but I couldn't get this to indent when I typed it straight in.
Emerald moss gently hugging slender branches
as they arch up to the misty moon
while no one glances.
Lest they see a dewdrop form
before the warm sun rises
on the early morn
When beast and sparrow
sing their welcome
on the morrow.
Once again, you are so great at descriptive words. I love the idea of capturing all these wonderful words to describe dawn. My suggestion would be to add another stanza, I feel what you are trying to capture, but I also feel like something is missing.
ReplyDeleteTeri--Blogger doesn't like indents or tabs so you aren't going crazy. Blogger just wants clean margins I guess. Sorry!
ReplyDeleteI think you have a great descriptive beginning but adding more will help us see and understand more.
Maybe drawing or painting what you are saying will help you add more. Paint what you have written here thus far. Then see what other details you could add as morning comes.